ext_23463 ([identity profile] ladyfox7oaks.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] neadods 2008-07-23 12:49 am (UTC)

A little, yes. Because you say Jack and Martha hesitated, then followed. (the others I presume?)

Then two paragraphs later, "Martha's and Jack's angry denials overlapped and the Doctor turned at bay, teeth bared. ..."

Sort of gives the impression that they were either still right there, having NOT gone inside. Or they are yelling across the lawn and through the window at each other.


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